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Every post needs to be moderated by the teacher and rather than proceeding through the editing process behind the scene, I am posting work before it is of publishing level. This is to allow comments of the readers to suggest the next steps for editing.
Points to celebrate:
More writing is being done - even from home.
Children are actively supporting the next steps suggestions for editing through comments.
I am just waiting for the bloggers to go back an make the suggested changes!
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This is the final edited copy of Lachie's writing.
The whistle blew. We’re off.
Josh passed me the ball. I was running like a leopard. There was a mud puddle as big as a swimming pool. I went right through it and then I slipped. The ball went into outer space. I got back up and then the ball came down as fast as an asteroid. Luckily I caught it, then I ran off as fast as I could. Suddenly another puddle was right in front of the try line and I was thinking should I pass it. No don’t pass it just score it. So I ran, I skidded and scored!
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